That was bad
Yeah, that was pretty terrible. I mean, what the hell do you think you're doing? Translating Shakespeare into "Black people talk"?!? That's just offensive. Have you even met a Black person before? You pulled just about every stereotype you could have given the circumstances.
Besides, this doesn't even show that you have really grasped the meaning of the Shakespeare stuff. If you were trying to update "Romeo & Juliet" and put it in a modern context, you failed miserably. What did your English teacher say about it?